Published November 4, 2008
I can't write haiku
Because I'm not Japanese
Hey . . . wait a second
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Awesome piece, though it's technically senry, as it doesn't deal with season. I still loved it though. c:
-Coral-
lol.THAT was funny
Haiku doesn't usually impress me, but I enjoyed this. Definitely made me laugh.
I honestly laughed out loud. XD
That was really great. I'm no expert on haiku, so I couldn't point out anything wrong with it.
Haiku is, to me, a rather difficult form of poetry, and I find it hard to write.
You, however, made it plain and clear that anyone can if they really want to (even if they aren't Japanese) XD
Keep writing!
*anti-pop
Very good. Cleverly done. Like others i dont think it is a dramatic poem but i loved it.
One point though
It is more difficult to tell the number of syllables in this line due to the ellipsis. I would remove it.
I would love to read more of your poems...
Dan
hehehehe.. This Haiku made me laugh.. I have some advice for you though.
Do not do ...'s while haiku. It sends the wrong message to readers that the dot dot dot's may be different syllables, and that the last line may have too many.
Other then that, thanks for the hilarious read!!! I loved this poem!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well I wish you the best of luck in figuring out how to write haiku. I know it is hard, when you have the round eyes, but keep trying at it, and some day you'll get it down. Maybe you could dye your hair and squint a lot, or learn some martial arts... eat with chopsticks... if you mispronounce your Rs for long enough you're sure to get it...
Hah, nice. Thanks for making me smile.
I really like this poem. The last line was my favorite. And (just guessing) it fits into dramatic poetry because it is so un-dramatic?
This is a short but sweet poem. I think it was great. I dont know how this fits into dramatic poetry but I loved it! It made me laugh and that is all that matters to me
This haiku made me smile!
Thank you.
lol that was actually really amusing.
I don't think I could've seen that ending coming XD
O_O That was unique! Wow. I laughed out loud, which I don't do often...
LOL i thinks that really funny but i don't know if it fits in dramatic poetry...
anyways i think the part about being japanese was funny kinda like wait i cant eat egg rolls i'm not chinese or something like that...
anyways keep writing i think you are good at funny poems. =D
EDIT: and i also like your signature it made my mom laugh (which doesn't happen often)